Monday, October 26, 2009

RJA #10a: Thesis Statement

Research Question: Are today farming practices inhumane?

Thesis Statement- Animal abuse is a common and known practice in today's farming industry. Industrial farming is a capitalistic business that has no regard for the over well being of their animals.

2 comments:

  1. You have a very good thesis statment. The only thing that i would change is maybe add an small example of how the buisiness has no reguard for the well being of the animals, just so your reader will get a good understanding of what they are going to be reading. Other than that its a good statement!

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  2. That is a pretty bold thesis statment. I like the wording, but I think there might be a typo. I agree wih Melissa, an example would make your thesis more concrete.

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